You shall write a creative paragraph about a place you have been that creates an evocative memory.
The wind in your hair, the smell of the trees, the sound of children everywhere. You look around and just stop in the moment, this is where I want to be. The sound of the triangle bringing everyone in line, waiting to give our needle before supper, when the director calls us in by our ages, the creeking of those old steps, up past the doors into the dining hall for supper. We say our pray, singing, clapping all together, and we sit, and eat. After there's an activity, fun, exciting, you can hear a pin drop, no one wants to miss the details of the game. And we know when we here meet at the flag pole at 7:15, it's time for free time... You run across the camp, to trip hut. And build a fire, big, warm. You leave with the smell of fresh campfire, all over your clothes. Camp is love. It's the sunset on Lake Waseosa. The running all over camp. The splash of the water, when you leap into the calm, still, lake. The crackle of the fire, on opening night. The sound of your paddle dipping into the lake. The sound of the drum, coming down the cabin path on Native Day. The creeking on the wooden floor, for wake up. It's the smiles that bring us together and the tears that fill our eyes when we part. It's the clicking of the pricker, the crunch of the mulch beneath your feet. It's where you go to feel complete.
This is good - a clear image of the place, some nice pics to help sell your piece. A few odd bits (clicker of the pricker?) and some simple little sentences that could be a little more flowing.
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It's a diabetic camp, when we test our blood we use a needle to prick our fingers (pricker) makes a clicking noise. It's a diabetic thing :P
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